有關於修改英檢初級複試段落寫作文批改的即時疑問~急急急~>< - 旅遊
By Annie
at 2014-04-17T00:00
at 2014-04-17T00:00
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以下是我剛剛寫好的英文作文:
This spring break, I went on a cycling tour of Taiwan by bicycle. I started from Taipei101, and rode toward the south first. In Taichung, I visited the beautiful park and ate some its famous food, Sun cakes, there. Then, on my way to Kenting National Park, I accidentally fell off my bicycle. It hurt so much, but I didn't give up. I finally got back to my sweet home and saw my parents waiting at the door. They ha been waiting for me for a while. After this cycling tour, I felt I had become brave enough to do anything on my own!
在下想問問現在有在線上的英文作文很強的大大~
能現在就評出分數ㄇ~????><
我後天就要考英檢初級的複試了~
所以很緊張想了解我可以拿到幾分~><
a.s.a.p
拜託了~><
This spring break, I went on a cycling tour of Taiwan by bicycle. I started from Taipei101, and rode toward the south first. In Taichung, I visited the beautiful park and ate some its famous food, Sun cakes, there. Then, on my way to Kenting National Park, I accidentally fell off my bicycle. It hurt so much, but I didn't give up. I finally got back to my sweet home and saw my parents waiting at the door. They ha been waiting for me for a while. After this cycling tour, I felt I had become brave enough to do anything on my own!
在下想問問現在有在線上的英文作文很強的大大~
能現在就評出分數ㄇ~????><
我後天就要考英檢初級的複試了~
所以很緊張想了解我可以拿到幾分~><
a.s.a.p
拜託了~><
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By Hardy
at 2014-04-19T07:56
at 2014-04-19T07:56
1.break 指短暫的休息如工作中的tea break,如指假期,指只短暫數日的假期如週末,像寒、暑假長時間的假日不適用break, 應使用vacation.2.ride toward the south first 先騎向南方,此句似有語意是否精準的問題,如旅程由台北開始,先到南部,再東南部、東北部,最後回到西北部,而文字上的”先騎向南方”,而不是”先到南部” ride to the South first, 那在抵達南部前,會否有突然改變方向” then ride toward the east”的可能(在到達南部前,應不會有突然騎向中央山脈的可能,但文字ride toward the south first 並沒有排除這樣的可能性),我的意思是說,語意的表達沒有一次到位,有被曲解的可能。南部 the South 之s必須大寫。 3. They had been waiting for me for a while 過去完成進行式,是在過去的某一時間`完成後,該情況仍持續進行的意思,但父母親應只會等到您回到家為止,就不再等下去,因此應改用用過去完成式。4.台中公園、太陽餅是專有名詞,故公園及餅字須大寫,餅使用單數。5.第一段”騎單車進行單車環台旅行”,單車環台當然是騎單車,因此”騎單車”是多餘的字,在不刪去的情況下,索性加上my “騎我自已的單車”做為一種補充性的敘述。6.fall off是質量下降的意思,從何處掉落 fall from.7.national park國家公園非專有名詞,第一個字毌不大寫。
2014-04-18 22:37:40 補充:
是環島嗎?還是僅是一次台灣的單車旅行"tour of Taiwan"? 我會錯意嗎?
2014-04-19 08:55:39 補充:
修正第一行為
This spring vacation I went on a cycling tour of Taiwan by my bicycle.
但我不了解,如不是環島,為何會先向南方行?
By Tristan Cohan
at 2014-04-20T12:38
at 2014-04-20T12:38
幫你整理好了,詳細資料在這邊
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希望其他回答者也認同我意見^^
By William
at 2014-04-18T05:30
at 2014-04-18T05:30
流暢度夠+文法OK
也有機會到5級分
但注意一點 你寫太多了
題目要求50字
最大極限就是壓縮在70~80字內
有些評分人員 可能會覺得你寫太多廢話
所以斟酌給分
也有些評分人員 會覺得50字算蝦米!?
100字寫得卡詳細啦 這樣
By Steve
at 2014-04-18T02:18
at 2014-04-18T02:18
滿分100的話 成績大概85吧
感覺文章挺順暢的 結尾結的也挺好
By Iris
at 2014-04-19T17:16
at 2014-04-19T17:16
but I just want to know it
I'm so nervous about the GEPT 's writing test >
By Olga
at 2014-04-18T03:22
at 2014-04-18T03:22
They ha been waiting for ==>They have been waiting for
Score is not everything, learning good English is.
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