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英文文法、語意校正 - 旅遊

Faithe avatarFaithe · 2012-06-04

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英文校正，第2、3段附中文參考謝謝!Iamveryfortunatetogrowinaharmoniousfamily.Therewerefourmembersinthefamily.Myfatherisabusinessmanandmymotherisahousewife.Moreover,Ihaveasmartolderbrother,whoismybestfriendathome.Myfamilyoffersmepreciousfamilywarmth,whichmoneycan’tbuy.Myparentswouldtakeadvantageofsparetimewithwholefamilytotravelaround.Travelforme,notjustthepressuretoreleasemoreseason
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Margaret avatarMargaret2012-06-06
Iamveryfortunatetogrowinaharmoniousfamily.Therewerefourmembersinthefamily.Myfatherisabusinessmanandmymotherisahousewife.Moreover,Ihaveasmartolderbrother,whoismybestfriendathome.Myfamilyoffersmepreciousfamilywarmth,whichmoneycan’tbuy.Myparentswouldtakeadvantageofsparetimewithwholefamilytotravelaround.Travelforme,notjustthepressuretoreleasemoreseasoninginmylife.我很幸運，成長在一個和諧
Yedda avatarYedda2012-06-08
你會覺得不順暢的原因可能是因為同一段裡的句子主詞不斷地換人，讓人讀起來有跳躍思考的困擾。