請英文高手幫我檢查文法!!拜託了>< - 旅遊

By Puput
at 2012-04-07T00:00

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某一年夏天，我和家人一起去墾丁旅遊，平常父母忙於事業很少出門，因此這次的旅遊經驗讓我印象深刻，記得那天到達墾丁已經是半夜，寬廣的道路上沒有半台車跟人影，這時報報突然把車停靠在路邊，並且叫我們下車看看天空，眼前所看見的是滿天的星星，好像用手就可以抓到,下一刻突然有流星劃過天空，所以我許了願望，直到現在我還記得那次的旅遊回憶，因為流星實現了我的願望。
Years of summer. My family and I are going to Kenting. Actually My parents are rarely go out,because they are busy on work. Therefore, it was very impressed experience in the travel . Remember to reach Kenting it was midnight, the wide road without a car and figure, At this time, father parked on the roadside told us to get off and look up at the sky, all the twinkling stars in the sky , likethe stars can be catch . This moment meteor has delimited the sky and I make a wish, Until now, I never forget that, because the meteor achieve my wish.
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Sorry..是爸爸不是報報..

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By Annie
at 2012-04-08T11:13

Years of summer,my family and I are going to Kenting.Actually,my
parents and I rarely go out because they are busy on work.
Therefore,it was impressed experience during the travel. I remember
to reach Kenting, the time was midnight, and the wide road was without
a car and figure.At this time,Father parked on the roadside and told
us to get off and look up at the sky. All the twinkling stars are shining
in the sky as if the stars can be caught. This moment meteor has
delimited the sky and I make a wish.Until now, I never forget
that because the meteor achieves my wish.

By Kyle
at 2012-04-07T02:34

During summer of one year, my family and I went on a trip to Kenting. Actually, my parents rarely went out to travel, because they were busy with their work. Therefore, this trip was a very unforgettable experience to me.I remember that it was already mid-night when we arrived Kenting. There was no car or figure on the wide road. At that time, my father parked on the roadside and told us to get off and look up at the sky. The sky were filled with twinkling stars. It seemed that I could reach out my hand and catch the stars. At this very moment, a meteor shotted across the sky and I made a wish. I will never forget that, because the meteor made my wish come true.
改了時態部份文法，也改了一些單字，不算高手所以不知道有沒有符合你想表達的，參考看看，希望以上回答有幫到你=)
2012-04-08 10:44:38 補充：
你的時態須改為過去式，因為你是講過去的事情，要用was或were。
2012-04-08 10:47:53 補充：
I remember to reach Kenting, the time was midnight文意有問題
這個意思是:我記得去墾丁
這句可以改成我回答裡面用的順序~